Double drabble: Don't

[galadriel1010]

Title: Don't
Characters: Jack and the 10th Doctor
Genre: Angst
Rating: G
Era: Post-CoE. Canon compliant
Series: Stand-alone
Summary: An alternative version of that scene in End of Time. Jack doesn't accept the Doctor's 'offer'
Contains:
Dedication: For teleen_fiction , whose meta about this I read yesterday, and it reminded me that I wanted to polish this story.
Beta:
Disclaimer: Torchwood and its environs, occurrences and persons belong to the BBC. The original characters have disowned me.


Jack followed the bartender's gesture to The Doctor and The Doctor's back to the man now next to him. “His name is Alonso.” He crumpled the note between his fingers and looked up to see the Timelord sliding through the crowd, job done.

He downed his drink and slid from the stool, following his former friend through the crowd and onto the corridor.

“There once was a man named Ianto Jones, who dared to love Jack Harkness. He looked past the flirting and found a spark that he could fan into love.” Jack's voice echoed down the corridor and stopped the Doctor. “And then he died. And no good looking sailor boy could replace him.”

“Don't judge him before you've met him, Jack.”

“You chose him; that's enough evidence. Ianto taught me that I'm more than you think I am.” He shook his head bitterly. “Why are you here?”

“I'm dying.”

Jack laughed mirthlessly. “I know the feeling. Come back with your new face and your new personality, and see if you can be sorry to me too.” He turned and walked away. “And I'll see if I can forgive you.”

Comments

[fiwen1010.livejournal.com]

Thanks hun :)
Gxxx

[aviv-b.livejournal.com]

I like this a lot better than the 'hello sailor' crap we got in that Dr. Who episode.

[fiwen1010.livejournal.com]

Thank you :) I hated that scene, poor Jack got shafted again
Gxxx

[thebuttonontop.livejournal.com]

i still agree with your canon more then theirs. much as i love the end of that episode... the Doctor does NOT always know whats right for jack.
gorgeous. *cuddles* and as it should be

[fiwen1010.livejournal.com]

The Doctor was awful in that scene, particularly. Apparently I tweeted when it happened "The Doctor's gift to Jack: Someone else for him to lose"
*Snuggles*
Rxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

[lone-star-woman.livejournal.com]

Ianto taught me that I'm more than you think I am.

Yes.

Nicely done.

[fiwen1010.livejournal.com]

Thank you :D
Gxxx

[idamus.livejournal.com]

Yeah see that sounds like Jack

[fiwen1010.livejournal.com]

Glad you thought so :D I hated that scene and had to do something about it. Like yell at the Doctor XD
Gxxx

[bk_forever]

Powerful and oh so right! This is the way it should have happened (except, of course, that I reject the events of CoE totally, so really, Jack and Ianto are still together and very happy!)

It's far truer to the characters than what was shown (sorry about the atrocious grammar!)

[rev02a.livejournal.com]

SHAZAM! Thank you, Jack.

[chocolatenianto.livejournal.com]

To damn right Jack.

"Ianto taught me that I'm more than you think I am" love this line, so true, Jack is so much better than the Doctor ever gave him credit for and he does still love Ianto.
I much prefer your version, I hate the original. But then again I belong to the CoE is a bad dream and Jack n Ianto are happy and together.

[littlblackghost.livejournal.com]

Oh. I liked that.

[rox712.livejournal.com]

A yera has passed and this is still the most brilliant thing I have read in a long, long time!